lunes, 30 de mayo de 2016

Go home

In class we read three poem and our teacher told us that we had to choose one of it poem and write an own poems about the poem we choose

Here is my poem:

I go home very tired 
I have my breakfast 
I say hello to my sister
I go to sleep.
I tell about my lovely to my mother
When I tell the marks she put ungry
But I now that she love me.

My sister hate me 
But when I need help she helps me
She is all the time playing with the tablet

I love a girl but she didn't love me
I show all my love to her 
She see me with a dark face






1 comentario:

  1. Well done Santiago. It´s interesting that your poem shows not only what happens inside your house but also inside yourself. I think the last stanza is the most poetic one and communicates a lot.
    Next time, remember to check grammar and spelling.

    "When I tell the marks she put ungry" should be "When I tell her my marks she gets angry".
    "But I now that she love me" should be "But I know that she loves me".

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