Here is my poem:
I go home very tired
I have my breakfast
I say hello to my sister
I go to sleep.
I tell about my lovely to my mother
When I tell the marks she put ungry
But I now that she love me.
My sister hate me
But when I need help she helps me
She is all the time playing with the tablet
I love a girl but she didn't love me
I show all my love to her
She see me with a dark face
Well done Santiago. It´s interesting that your poem shows not only what happens inside your house but also inside yourself. I think the last stanza is the most poetic one and communicates a lot.
ResponderBorrarNext time, remember to check grammar and spelling.
"When I tell the marks she put ungry" should be "When I tell her my marks she gets angry".
"But I now that she love me" should be "But I know that she loves me".
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